Dominique The Unbreakable

I REALLY REALLY REALLY like it, I get what you mean. Very easy to relate to but... Yeah the structure should have been more punctuated. Instead of a huge run-on ...

Hi there! I really liked this one and the rhyming was phenomenal! Though it seemed to me at this part: My heart goes out in the middle of the night, ...

The idea was great for your first poem :) but... I didn't flow and that was because the lines were so short. Trying to read this poem aloud was a ...

W.O.W. I really enjoyed this. Your detail was captivating. I felt as if I was right there watching the whole thing. I also liked how you were consistent through the ...

To tell you the truth, I don't understand it at all. Who is "we" I understand that you are comparing "we" to the "Dark Side Day" but other than that ...

This is a poem that I'm sure many people can relate to. I thought it was very good, I could feel your emotion through your words. But the lines are ...

Hmm, interesting. I like Twilight as well so I think I can understand your feelings a bit more than other people who really haven't experience the whole "fall in love ...

This was interesting. Nice description, and it did paint a picture in my mind. Your feelings pretty much bled through the words. It was nice, kinda inspirational actually. :) It ...

Well done is how I'm going to start out. I think many people can relate to this. I can tell that a lot of feeling and thought was put into ...

Wow, this was very good. I was hooked onto it mostly the whole way through. Something that I caught was this: There was a huge possibility that we would die ...

This was very interesting. I was engrossed in it from the third verse. Very beautiful. I did enjoy reading it. It painted a vision in my mind. Everything in it ...

This was a very beautiful and heartfelt poem. I could just feel your emotions in the poem. :smt001 Your description about the heart and the apartments, that was creative and ...

I liked this one. It was very creative and the grammar, well, you shouldn't worry. That will get better with time :wink: I'm not to well with it myself so ...

Well it did have it's very good moments, you described many things well, For Example: The Yarok bellows in pain as it stains the snow crimson in its death throws. ...

Wow, it really gave an interesting take on vampires, and it was funny. You are very descriptive when you explain things. Wow is all I can say. I really liked ...